Talk:Harry Crerar/GA1
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 01:49, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
Will review this week. Hog Farm Talk 01:49, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
I made several copy edits, revert anything you don't agree with
- "During the The Second World War" - duplicate the
- "Vienna to study the manufacture of Incandescent light bulbs." - I'm not sure that Incandescent should be capitalized
- "SORA) by Major Don A, White" - is the comma intentional
- "First Canadian Army became operational Normandy at noon on 23 July" - missing a word?
- "Crerar immediately clashed his Crocker" - ?
- "the Crocker and the commander of the British Second Army" - ?
- " Keller was seriously wounded in an attack by American bombers on 8 August, and was succeeded by Major-General Daniel Spry ten days later." - Surely if it was the Americans, it would have been an accident, so attack seems like a weird word choice
- Order of Leopold seems to only be in infobox, as do the two Croix de Guerres, the Order of the White Lion, and the Order of Kutuzov
- "Croix Croix de Guerre 1940 with Palm (Belgium)" - Is the double Croix intentional?
- Sourcing looks good.